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  • Mirneeebear

    Mirneeebear (100)

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    It's good. I also agree with Love and Learn;

    Also,

    "She knew she was lieing to herself and her friends and Jack, but she knew that she needed to change the situation."

    lieing is spelled lying.
    January 2nd, 2010 at 07:13am
  • delicate to love

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    It was good and I enjoyed it.
    However, I agree with Love and Learn;.
    It did seem like you had more of the lyrics than the actual story.
    December 21st, 2009 at 04:08am
  • Last time around;

    Last time around; (100)

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    I like it, but i think the lyrics over power your actual writing.
    Maybe you should lessen the amount of lyrics, and write a little more.

    But it was still good,
    just too much lyrics. (:
    December 20th, 2009 at 09:39pm
  • starting to believe;

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    This is cuteee.
    Good job. :)
    December 20th, 2009 at 09:32pm
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