The Thoughts of One Moment - Comments

  • rachemical

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    aw this is a rather sad chapter :(
    poor riley.
    but nice chapter!
    May 6th, 2010 at 11:55am
  • ShelbyLovesKevinJ

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    Sooooooo sad!! I hate goodbyes!
    May 6th, 2010 at 12:42am
  • secrets-that-die

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    Loved the update
    <33
    May 5th, 2010 at 11:43pm
  • rachemical

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    aw youre welcome :)
    your kitty really thinks it's a real mouse, doesnt it? lol
    March 30th, 2010 at 06:55am
  • ShelbyLovesKevinJ

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    I feel like something big is going to happen while they're in Cali...
    I can't wait to find out!!
    March 30th, 2010 at 06:28am
  • chemical romantics.

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    I liked it. There's this thing though, your chapters always seem really filler-ish. I think if you added more description and detail etc. It would straighten out, I love it, but its like it's half way there. :)

    Another thing is, I think you need to plan your characters more carefully, they're good but there are holes. Just the way they interact. On the upside, I do absolutely love this plot so :D :D :D HAHAHA.
    March 30th, 2010 at 06:18am
  • ShelbyLovesKevinJ

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    Lovin' this story. Frankie is hilarious.
    March 25th, 2010 at 01:51am
  • rachemical

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    whoop, bad Rikki!
    aw dont be sorry, it's okay :)
    at least you still update your story unlikely me. lol
    March 23rd, 2010 at 10:26am
  • IvySaint

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    can't wait for the next update,sure its good as the last one! ;D
    March 22nd, 2010 at 09:15pm
  • MissAmerica

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    This is really good. U should update soon. :P
    March 8th, 2010 at 04:46am
  • chemical romantics.

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    Gerard is way too cute to be male. :)
    Ahahaha, he's like ::adorable:

    anyway, I loved the chapter, even if it was rather filler-ish.
    I sympathise with you, moving is no fun -cheese-
    update soon? kays. :D
    March 7th, 2010 at 01:53am
  • nissarevenge

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    Aww poor Gee.
    Cute update.
    March 4th, 2010 at 10:39am
  • rachemical

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    aw it's okay. at least you still do the update :)
    cant wait to read some more! XX
    March 3rd, 2010 at 01:19pm
  • secrets-that-die

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    lol, loved he update
    March 2nd, 2010 at 11:15pm
  • jessica jealousy xD

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    frankie is a sexy stranger ;) ILL BUNK WIFF YOU FRANKIE!
    Love the update!!! love the story!!! LOVE YOU!!! haha
    update soon! Or i will have to release the hounds. :O
    March 2nd, 2010 at 07:54pm
  • IvySaint

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    haha,well I loved the update,can't wait for the next one!
    March 2nd, 2010 at 07:43pm
  • chemical romantics.

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    I like the photography aspect, it ties it together well.
    and the story is written fairly well, except I find your dialogue hard to follow at times.
    Other than that the story is really good!
    Update soon? (:
    February 18th, 2010 at 03:09pm
  • jessica jealousy xD

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    Oooooooh frankie is my man! Lol
    Thats what i would do if i saw my friends kissing. lol :D
    loved it update soon!
    February 16th, 2010 at 11:04pm
  • IvySaint

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    wow,I really loved the updates,can't wait til the next one!
    February 14th, 2010 at 10:07pm
  • rachemical

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    just friends?
    Gerard gotta ask her out anytime soon! lol
    xx
    February 14th, 2010 at 01:16pm