Trashed and Scattered - Comments

It's long, but I like how truthful it is. It shows you a ugly side of society we like to hide away.

The full length of this is being written up right at this moment! (:

:) Thanks so much, all of you.

This is probably one of the saddest things I have ever read, but I loved it! It’s so real, unlike some of the abuse stories I have read since I’ve gotten mibba. The song matches perfectly with the idea I get when I read this. I read it twice, just for the record :D

I'm judging for the Pre-write contest. It was long and read more like a beginning chapter than a one shot, but that's not bad if you're going to expand it like you said. It was an interesting read. Good work.

It was indeed long, but that definitely wasn't a bad thing.
Admittedly, somewhere near the middle I almost wondered how you could bring it to a close, because it seemed a lot more like a story than a one-shot.
But then you surprised me at the end and tied it all together perfectly.
The way you used the song was great; just what I was looking for.
The emotion in the story was really strong, which I always like.
"If only they knew that the scars on my outershell weren't the only ones. I've got scars inside."
My favorite line of the one-shot, hands down. So vivid.
Thanks so much for entering this in my contest! I loved it.