This is probably one of the saddest things I have ever read, but I loved it! It’s so real, unlike some of the abuse stories I have read since I’ve gotten mibba. The song matches perfectly with the idea I get when I read this. I read it twice, just for the record :D
I'm judging for the Pre-write contest. It was long and read more like a beginning chapter than a one shot, but that's not bad if you're going to expand it like you said. It was an interesting read. Good work.
It was indeed long, but that definitely wasn't a bad thing. Admittedly, somewhere near the middle I almost wondered how you could bring it to a close, because it seemed a lot more like a story than a one-shot. But then you surprised me at the end and tied it all together perfectly. The way you used the song was great; just what I was looking for. The emotion in the story was really strong, which I always like. "If only they knew that the scars on my outershell weren't the only ones. I've got scars inside." My favorite line of the one-shot, hands down. So vivid. Thanks so much for entering this in my contest! I loved it.