Brown Eyes - Comments

This was brilliant.
This was amazing and happy and sad. An amazingly written drabble.
Good work! I loved it (:

One Shot for One Shot.

That was amazing. Your very good at desripition, I love your style of writing. It had feeling and depth, that's what made it enticing. Although it was short it was a very good read.

Well done. :]

One Shot for One Shot

Oh my. Oh my goodness. That was... shocking.

The ending completely caught me by surprise. That one, last sentence changed the whole meaning of the story. That one sentence really makes me think. This was ingenious.

You already scored bonus points with me for original fiction, and amazing original fiction at that. It's so short but there's so much emotion packed into every sentence that you feel it really must have been inspired. The imagery manages to be really powerful yet hide none of the emotions in it, and it's just worded beautifully.

One Shot For One Shot.
Oh dear.
That was amazing.
I loved how you started it, The first and last thing that I noticed about him was his brown eyes.
That was really great.
The imagery and description were amazing.
There was so much emotional in such a short amount of words.
It was sad but really lovely.

Absolutely brilliant.

One Shot For One Shot.

Now, that absolutely killed me. The description was wonderful and the imagery was fantastic. The end was way unexpected, but it was brilliant. I finally realized what happened after I read it all over twice, but it was worth it. The emotion was all packed into one short piece and definitely left me wanting way more. Good job, hun!

Oh. My. Goodness.
This was short, and sweet, and sad.
But great.
For such a short story, it had a lot. The writing style was very nice, and the story was stunning.
I didn't expect the ending. That was a nice surprise. It was sad, but good.
Why did she have to do that?
This leaves me wanting more.
Brilliant. Wonderful.