July 16th, 2010 at 08:55pm
Oh my, this was so so sad. :'( The last line really hit me.
You watch as her bird-arms snake protectively around her waist, the piano bones of her ribcage jutting through and all that’s running through your head is where did I go wrong?
I like the contrast between bird-arms snaking around her waist. Or at least I think contrast is the right word. And then how you describe her bones are piano keys, that is brilliant.
(she’s dead on her feet, dead on her fairy bone feet.)
Describing her as a 'fairy' is great. Because she's so thin and airy. I love that.
And your heart breaks again and again because you’re supposed to be the hero and help her get through thick and thin and now that’s all that’s left of her; thin.
This is my favorite line. Because every dad is suppose to be a 'hero' and you can really tell hoe bad he is hurting. And I think it's a nice play on the title.
All in all this was an amazing story. :)
This made me think of something I went through with my dad.
Wonderful story, great last line.