It was really good, sweeties, but I think you could have made it longer, because I felt like it moved too fast. Maybe extended with backstory etc it wouldn't have felt that way.
My gosh. That was...wow. I am still trying to wrap my head around it all because it was so good. The ending was great. Have I told you that you are good at endings? Cause you really are. This was truly amazing! Ah I wish there was more but it is perfect how it is!!! =]
Haha. Nice Work. It Is Not The Sorta Stuff I Normally Read, But With Your Amazing Skill, I Was Encaptured And Found Myself Rather Enjoying It. Please Let Me Know When You Have Written The Epilogue. :)