Sam - Comments

so sad for Kelly and Sam. He seems stronger but must've been hard for him too. I like a story with much dialogues and I liked yours, you are a good writer! "Yesterday’s history, tomorrow’s a mystery, and today is a gift, that’s why it’s called the present,” I love that quote, seen it for the first time :D

Awww that was cute.
Sam is such a good older brother.

That was a very good story.
It was kind a bitter sweet in a way
because at least now there safe from there parents;
but Sam still murdered them.

The only advice I could give you is maybe try to put in less of the dialogue
and more descriptions, and insight into the characters heads; whats going through there mind.
That way the reader will feel liek they have more of a connection with the characters.

But other than that i really did like it = ]

write more!!!