Our Time Has Come, and We've Got These Big City Dreams - Comments

Its a little overdone this plotline and sort of completely unrealistic too. However its not 'badly done'. You've got a fairly nice style, it feels familiar when you read it. I think the one thing I'd ask you to consider is adding a lot more detail. It'd pad your chapters out and I suppose improve the flow.

If you have any questions, feel free to comment me, I can give you some examples too if you'd like :)
I'll subscribe and we can see where this goes, eh? Haha.

Ohmygossshhh.
Is her dad, like, an abusive drunkk?
Alex BETTER be there to protect her!

I can't wait to read more.
update please :))

She BETTER say yes! or else, I'll jump into that story and bitch slap her, then go and take her place!
=]
Great story, Katey!

Great, great, GREAT so far xD I'm loving it, like seriously (:

I'm the only one commenting, haha (: Love the story so far!

Great job ;) I love the way you describe the town and her feelings.
I can't WAIT for more, Kat!