I Fell For A Rebel - Comments

Piranha Priya (100)

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i really like this story......i have a feeling that mason will surprise us all!

im not gonna push you to update. Update when you feel is right...that all a writer can do!!!

lol have fun....AND YOUR AMAZING...at writing this story

January 14th, 2010 at 03:43am

BlissfulNightmare; (100)

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two: That was so cute. The descriptions were decent. Wondering what's going to happen next?

January 9th, 2010 at 08:41pm

BlissfulNightmare; (100)

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Cuteness for a great start to an awesome story. Might want to say what part of Carolina; seeing as there's two. Can't wait to read the next chapter.

January 9th, 2010 at 08:38pm

Drop Dead Georgia (100)

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Its not what you think.... ;)

January 9th, 2010 at 08:31pm

Faith Tenderheart; (100)

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Ohhhhhh over to his place ;) Ha ha update!!!! =)

January 9th, 2010 at 08:22pm

Mali (100)

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SHIT! That's a lot of typos! I need practice with this thing o.o

January 9th, 2010 at 01:29pm

Mali (100)

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Hey :D
I haven'tquite finished all you've written so far, but I really feel I should say a few things.
Firsly, for a beginner, this is magnificent work. The first time I put up a story I was 13 and not nearly half as good as you are. And it's because you are so much better than any oher 13 ur old I've seen on this site that I want to help you get that mch better. I hope you don't mind :/
I got a few quick tips on page set up for now, and if you coll me helping you more hit me up through my profile or inbox.
First, you should put a whole line of space between you paragraphs to add clarity to the page. Doing so also helps to make your writing seem longer and gives readers more appeal.
Also, you need to work on you typos. I know I make a lot so I have an editor for each of my continueing stories, you could probably find one easy. Mostly they just read the next chapter before you put it up and point out spelling and pncuation mistakes.
Ha; well, that's all the small stuff I can think of on the spot.
Hope I haven't insulted you in some way, and sorry if I got heaps of typos in the comment, I'm using my dads iPhone so the possibility is high.
Anyway, message if you want more.
Nice job so far...
-Saskia-

January 9th, 2010 at 01:26pm