She Lives in a Fairytale, too Far for us to Find - Comments

It stopped right when it was getting good! update soon.

Not trying to be mean or anything, but the story seems very rushed and there's way too many POVs it's really confusing. Maybe you should try slowing it down a bit and sticking to one or two point of views

I love you. :D hehe

love the update :D

Will do kind sir.

<3 this is amazing!
keep it coming!

thank you.

love the update :D

love the update :D

XD Well I didn't rewrite them by myself my friend Calli helped me with that which is saying she mostly gave more detail to what I was thinking.

not sure how many you've already rewritten but I still like it. I can't wait to read more :)

love this so far :D imma subscribing :D

Haha its okay I wrote it cause i just could not keep you in suspense.

Okay so I was wrong :(
But it's still cute :)

Update. :)
And your story is looking good.

update soonnnnnnnnnnnn please

Haha maybe or maybe not.

It's Adam!

okay, well, firstly, your story is very confusing for me. I mean, your plot line is good, but your story just whips by. It's like one moment they are doing something on one side of the world, and the next instant they are on the other side, and doing something completely different. Try to put more detail in, and not so much just blasting through the story. Also, you should work on your punctuation. No offense, but when I am reading it, it sounds like a person who doesn't breathe, and is just spitting out words. I liked it, it just sounds breathless and rushed. Another thing is try to clarify what''s going on. This story has the potential to be really great.

Thanks Guys I'm glad you comment and always tell me when I mess up it doesn't hurt my feelings. XD. It just means I'm human and I make mistakes.