Determination - Comments

You're alive!!! :)

Well, I'm glad she's decided she wants to try to be friends.
Now I really wanna know what happens!! :)

Good update!

"i love all six of you with a hot, burning passion" - ahahaha that made me laugh :D
great chapter my dear, i look forward to an update

It's been a while...I'm glad you updated!
So this story is still pretty good, and I'm anxious to see how Chase and Hailey get along...:)
Until next time, then :)

Nice innocent story whoring there hon!
Glad to see this story is up and running again!
It's very...not intense...but almost!

Okay, so I'm going to make a random stab at the secret hinted in the chapter: someone died on that day, and she doesn't want to remember, and she's an alchoholic and had a bottle full of vodka.

How close did I get???

Haha. Well, I'm really enjoying the story and I can't wait until you update again...^^

I remember reading this a while ago, and I thought it was pretty good then and I still think it's pretty good. You're writing's good, even if the plot is a little cliche. The layout is really pretty, but I'm failing to see where it ties in with the story; that could just be me though. Anyway, keep up with the great work :)

AMAZING!!!

To be honest, painfully so, I had no idea what this was when I clicked on it. Then I got halfway through the update, and it all came rushing back to me!!! And I'm like OMZ it's being updated again?! lol. Great one, can't wait for more XD

I remember Lemony Snicket...*sigh* Good stories.
I really hope inspiration strikes you again, dear. This was going somewhere and it still can.
The problems this girl goes through are extremely easy to relate to for people at her age and although the ending was a little predictable it fit the first chapter well. I like how you give her those little characteristics, not crying being my favorite.

Honestly this was great. I should have read it sooner.

In the summary instead of simply putting that determination is a noun,
I think you should've put the definition as well.
If you did and I somehow don't remember seeing it
I'm a retard.

The layout wasn't very attractive.
You should either look at some other people's layouts or ask someone to make you a nice pretty one. :]

The story itself was cute. So far, it's very interesting.
I don't really see much originality to it, but I'm sure as it progresses it'll get better.
Plus, I've only gotten through the first chapter. :]

I think this is pretty great.
It flows nicely and everything. You gave her quirks and such, which I like.
The plot is a tad cliche, that I'll admit, but I'm sure you can turn it around.
Chase is my favourite, I think. :D
And in the first chapter, the Lemony Snicket thing was cool. I liked his books, so I was like "YES!"
Yea, anyways, good job man.
:)

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY update =3.
I cannot wait to see where you're going to go with this one!
(PSSSST...if you like stories that are going to be a little bloody later, or good vs. evil, I'm working on one (it's not posted yet) that has both...hint hint)
I so didn't just drop a hint that I'm going to be starting a new story anytime soon, nooooo...
Anyway, I love the story, and I like how you're developing your plot and characters. Keep up the fan-fricking-tastic work!!!

This is a little, I don't know, cliche?
But it's super good anyway.

I really like Chase's personality,
she makes me smile.
I'm determined to figure out Hailey's secrets, like Chase is.

I'm excited to read further into this.

This is good, if not a bit cliche, it has really nice flow.
You have a great balance of description.
I liked how you mentioned Lemony Snicket. I loved those books.
And also that one teacher's name, Ms. Ender, reminded me of Ender's Game.
I guess I'm up for noticing stories within stories today. =]

Very good beginning, I thought.
I like how you're taking the time to develop your characters. Like many others have said, if Chase were a real person that I knew, I can't exactly say we'd be friends

Anyway, I loved the Lemony Snicket reference in the first chapter. His books were amazing.

You've done good with this so far, and I think that you can only keep getting better XD

Usually I don't like stories in third-person, but wow. I did like this. =]
-subscribes-

This is a very good beginning, but I'd like to have seen it done differently. You rather rushed into an explanation of her life. I think it would have been better if she had gone home, and maybe after she had spoken with her mother or arrived home you could have launched into the back story.

That being said, you write very well for someone of your age. Keep up the good work!

Expert writing, especially for your age. Very verbose, very emotionally involving, very fluent. The fact that you'd mention Lemony Snicket made my heart sink a little bit, since I remember how bittersweet it was to read his stories, and think of them while I cried as a little boy.

Brilliant, to say the least. More.

Doctor

This is lovely (: You honestly
don't write like most thirteen
year olds :D I really like Chase
and her bubbly personality. I
have a friend who's exactly
like that xD I can't wait to read
more <333

Love it =3

I kind of agree with Painfully.Obvious - you don't write like a thirteen year old normally does, because a lot of times thirteen year olds use stuff lyk dis and can't speel worth a darn, u kno? haha xP
But I seriously love this. And the line "Almost only counts in horseshoes". LOVE that line. A lot. xP

This is really, really good. Truly, it is. I like it. I like it enough to subscribe.

x) Can't wait for more, ay?

Oh, by the way - I loved The Sun Goes Down and So Does She. Are you sure you're thirteen? You write like a university student with an English Major. :D