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I think this is absolutely amazing.

It's funny how you believed in me when I went to art school, and it's funny how I just dropped out.
It's funny how we started selling ourselves on the street together, and it's funny how nobody found out.

These are my favourite lines. I'm not sure, why, but when I read it, these stood out the most. I think the first one because it's what made me realise how much the character could have missed out on, and how he dropped out of something he really wanted to do, and yet the thing that he dwells on most is that the other character (Frank I imagined it as) believed in him and in effect, he didn't give up a career, he gave up on that belief.

The second line I love because it sticks with the whole bitter-sweet thing you have going on (such as the end lines, cough up blood, and love you so much). Selling ourselves on the street immediately followed by together. It makes the idea seem almost lovely, when really, it's a horrible thing. And then it's funny how nobody found out, sounding as if they're in their own world, possibly because they have blocked themselves in, not wanting anyone else involved, similar to the whole I never asked thing.

Speaking of which, I love. How it changes to I asked shows that Gerard is such an independant person, someone who likes to believe he is strong, and yet with Frank, he isn't as strong as he's always acted because he doesn't need to be.

It's truely a beautiful piece of writing. Things like this give me hope :)

I dunno what to say!
I was so into this while reading it.
I love hoe you reapeted 'I never asked' all the time,
and then come with 'I asked'.
Just lovely!

omg! that was so sweet and beautiful and and i crieddd.
you are an amazing writer, love everything you write
especialy this!!!
breath taking

Fucking AW!
Totally agreeing with the ones above. Totally beautiful.
Amazing..

I agree with Devihla. This was fucking amazong. Beautiful, even. The story flowed so smoothly and it had a brilliant ending. You've written it so well. That's all I have to say :)

This was incredibly beautiful!
Through the story, I had a very serious frown on my face. I was so into it.
But when I reached the line I asked, the biggest smile was immediately on my face, as if someone had pulled my cheeks up.
This was so cute and so real and so incredibly written. The fact that each paragraph was held together by I never asked made the entire story flow, and as soon as that changed to I asked, it became happy. Even though the last few paragraphs were written in a kinda bittersweet tone, the happiness was still much greater. At least to me. =D
This was really beautiful!
Incredible!

This was incredibly beautiful!
Through the story, I had a very serious frown on my face. I was so into it.
But when I reached the line I asked, the biggest smile was immediately on my face, as if someone had pulled my cheeks up.
This was so cute and so real and so incredibly written. The fact that each paragraph was held together by I didn't ask made the entire story flow, and as soon as that changed to I asked, it became happy. Even though the last few paragraphs were written in a kinda bittersweet tone, the happiness was still much greater. At least to me. =D
This was really beautiful!
Incredible!