okay so first off i'll just say ur chapters are a little short, you could make them a bit longer (i should know i've seen the story in ur notebook) um...i really think you should change the layout...not the pic or color, but how your text is layed out...oddly so yea that's all i have to say...(i have a feeling your going to yell at me...please don't yell at me 2morrow i don't like it when you yell at me it hurts my ears!)