Black Ink. Revenge - Comments

This isn't a grammar thing, but:

'The room is dim, only lit up by the flashlights sweeping over the walls and floor, chasing the shadows of the young couples dancing violently to the beat of the music.'
-You don't really need the 'up' and if you reversed the 'lit' and the 'only' it would flow better.

'The smell chokes me for a second; the scents of sweat, alcohol, smoke and blood seems to aim for my lungs, wandering through my nose thrills and throat. It leaves its path itchy and sore.'
- 'seems' should be seem
- also, if you wanted, you could put [and wander] instead of 'wandering'.

'...we both know how bad I like this kind of places.'
- how badly I like these kinds of places.

just a couple, like I said. Although perhaps 'seems' isn't grammar, but spelling?

Yeah, those were just a couple of things.
Hope that helped :)

Very cool. I like how you alternated between past and present. Personally, I think this really made your fic. Couple of grammar/spelling things, but they were minor. Your storyline was unique and I really liked the ending where Noah hands her the song. Genius.
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Thank you both of you! It really means a lot to me that you took your time reading it ans even left a comment. Seriously, thanks for making my night : D

This is amazing. [: I loved how you alternated between the flashbacks and the present.

Ooh, this was really good! Liked it!