Your picture in the background doesn't work anymore, so you can't see ANY of the words. Just wanted to say.
February 13th, 2010 at 03:12am
The story is good, but I think the writing could use some editing before you put it up. All of the typos and grammar errors are distracting and take away from the intrigue of the story.
I'm not trying to be mean, just trying to give some constructive criticism. I hope you take it as that and work to improve your writing.