Knock Out - Comments

big bad wolf. (115)

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Please update! You need to finish it! Please!! <3
I am loving it!

December 3rd, 2011 at 03:33am

headrushxreeta (100)

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wowzers! amaaaaazing hotness! loved every word of it!

June 30th, 2010 at 09:25pm

Shadowsgirl (100)

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wow!
I woulden't mind Matt doing that to me!
so hot!
:)

February 1st, 2010 at 10:06pm

lizicea7x (100)

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haha its good yey i would love to join him haha and it was kind of weird the part were they fuck in the ring.
please make it longer :P

January 20th, 2010 at 02:53am

InsanePlagued (100)

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wow... only one comment so far?
im sorry, but this is worth way more than (what will be 2). you dont come across writers like you very often at all. keep it up!

and int he 2nd chapter, i think maybe the 2nd or 3rd paragraph there's a sentence that gets repeated in itself...
like, i said hi to you and i said hi to you yesterday morning... just to let you know :)

January 20th, 2010 at 02:52am

x.Kris.x (100)

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I can't believe no one's commented on this yet. And I can't believe you ended the first chapter there! Oh god! Talk about cliff hanger...

This is phenomenal. The beginning and descriptions are a little cliche, what with the whole "tomboy" thing, comparing her to the big boobed model chicks and everything. But I love the way you embed the emotional aspect into the writing. The sentences are practically dripping with fantasy and sexual tension! I couldn't stop laughing at the *ahem* "misused" words...He he he. I'm dying to see what happens next. Don't leave us hanging like this! I mean, it's Shads-man...who doesn't want to join him?

January 16th, 2010 at 03:36am