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finally a really good x men fan fic. update sooner pleaseee (:

better. :)
i can't wait for more,

i love x-men so yay!! lol

I think you should continue it, i think u'd make a great writer,
but i also think its a little, well... dull. No offense, It just needs a bit more description and I think u should have lengthened it out just a bit, and maybe -as an example- when Xhavier arrived you could have made it seem a little, mysteryous? something like 'I had heard someone come to the door and speak to my parents, but when they called me down i became worried, I thought...'
now these are all examples and advice, u should write how u want to and well, im a nerd so i think writing -wether its a fiction novel or anything at all- will be somewhat of a self expression, so... express yourself! :)
Its YOUR story, and i will gladly read more if you continue! :)

X-men is like my drity secret ;) amazing can't wait for more!

Oooo. I like... Can't wait for the next one!