I'm Sorry - Comments

Hi, revival judge for the Hit Me With Your Best Shot contest!

Tragedy is always a genre I'm drawn to. There's just something about witnessing character go through heart-wrenching situations and having them have to deal with the agony over and over. It's pure emotion that is conveyed on a page and when an author can do that, they've done a good job.

I feel as if the first chapter helps set the stage - showing us that these two characters have parted ways and that one isn't quite sure how to take it because they didn't want it to happen or ever expected it. The second is the one that shows the desperation of the author of the letter, their intense wanting to discover where the receiver has one. Then the third delivers the heartbreaking news but felt somewhat anti-climatic.

The letter from Joey's mother felt a bit blunt, a bit just produced. It lacked the emotion that the other two letters held and that the last letter had when it came to the ending of it. That's my real criticism of this piece other than the fact that the layout was pretty unreadable and I had to default to even attempt this.

I cried when I read this one. It was great!
I love your layout of the story and the detail involved.

The layout was good but the font kind of made it hard to read for me; I understand that you wanted it to look like a letter but if you maybe made it larger it'd be less of a strain.

That was heart wretching, it was so sad and beautiful at the same time. I did not expect that at all after the first two chapters.

Well done

Aww, I'm always a sucker for tragic endings! I like how you made the entire story in letters; t'was very ingenious. Really well written!

this si so sad!!!
i love it <3