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  • Smoothies

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    I thought it was a little hard to read as the picture went behind the words sometimes.

    There are a lot of grammar mistakes that you could probably fix if you reread it a few times or got someone else to help you with that. One thing I noticed was that you often missed punctuation at the end of dialogue.

    Other than that I thought this was a sad but sweet kind of story and I liked that about it.
    July 17th, 2012 at 10:07pm
  • vividly.alive

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    This was really well done. I truly enjoyed this :)
    January 18th, 2010 at 12:28am
  • northernlights;

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    oh wow i love that.
    the plot was amazing.
    and i liked how you used the bird to symbolize freedom.
    great job(:
    January 18th, 2010 at 12:05am
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