""If you say Brokeback Mountain, I will kill you."" I really liked that line. Totally made me laugh! Haha. I'm not really big on third person, but I like how this was written. TOTALLY wasn't expecting there to be a camera in the elevator. I'm not big on NCIS, so I had pictures of the characters open the whole time I was reading.:p But, I liked it. You're a great writer!!:)
Writing more as we speak, I shoulod have the next chapter up tonight. I will let you decide if you want any more after that. Glad you're enjoying it. :)