On the Brinks - Comments

This is well written. I got a little bit confused with the flashbacks :) But it's very cute. I like the characters that you have created :)
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I love the theme of the story. I've always been a fan of stories about friendships.
It's very well written!
I love how you formed the character's personalities. They're very distinct.
I'm subscribing, looking forward to reading more! :D

I really love their friendship :D they are like best friends forever, they remind me of me and my best friend.

I really really love this story, I can't wait to read more

I'm loving the friendship theme you have going on =D !!!
Apart from a few typos, it was pretty cool. I was a bit confused however, with the whole time lapses although I'd blame personal preference. [or the fact that I'm still in a crappy mood about school starting tomorrow =P]
But still...keep going....
Oh... and those blond girls....=P =P
I'd love for them to pull my braids .... >:(

I love this story, my name is Bethany and the character really reminds me of myself. I love the story :D I can't wait to read more

In chapter one I can already see the bond of friendship beginning these types of stories are hard to get into but you have proved me wrong by starting this out really well.

“Remember Bethany I will always love you. No matter what happens, this will not be the last time I see you. Now remember to write, miss you already Beth. Bye!”

I was a bit thrown off by this line, but it did begin to piece itself together as I read.

“Because I’m tired, tired of dealing with this, tired of people worrying. I thought that when I came here, it would all be over. I was fine. Dale, I was perfectly healthy.” Tears rolled down her cheeks. She hated this, hated the crying, hated the knowing, hated it all.

Very strong emotions displayed here, I loved the movie A Walk To Remember btw <3

A girl sat in front of an old, classic mirror. She sighed, ripping her hair out of a long braid.

This line alone is very powerful, good way to start out a chapter. I like the moment she had with Davey, and the fact that she was going out with faith. How they ended up in the fountain made me smile I am eager to read the rest of this :D