Kids in Love - Comments

Hehehe, congratulations, love.
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Hey, bb.
You got third place!
Congratulations, and just message or comment me with the two stories you want me to comment
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this was really wonderful(:
i loved it.

This was truly beautiful.

Okay, just so you know, I really liked this. I rarely read any original fiction, but I did like this.

I noticed a couple of errors, like forgetting to put 'and' in some places. Unless, of course, you meant for it to be like that.

I think it might have moved a little too quickly: there was no actual point where Chrisopher made it clear the he too, liked him in the same way. I do like, however, the way he was 'forget your doubts and come with me' so to speak.

I didn't see any spelling errors, so congrats on that.

My heart rate increased, my stomach fluttering like the butterflies I like to watch in the summer with Christopher. Those days are always so carefree and lazy, just laying in a warm grassy field next to your best friend, watching the butterflies go by.
That was my favorite part, by the way. It was descriptive and gave a very clear image in my head.

Thanks for entering, boo.

First of all, Christopher James was hella sexy, man.
Just so you know. Anyways.

Well, all in all, this was really great. :D.
I'm very pleased with how you executed everything. :)

My heart rate increased, my stomach fluttering like the butterflies I like to watch in the summer with Christopher.
AMAZING LINE. I loved that.
They're adorable. I like how Dakota would rather stay friends with him, rather than ever thinking of risking anything more. Then, in turn, how Christopher wanted nothing more than for Dakota to just admit it and risk it.
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The grammar, of course, was good-- something that earns you tons of brownie points in my book. I can't even recall a mistake in this.
This was/is really lovely, and thanks so much for entering, love.
:)

: I concur, child.