Delude - Comments

I love the story line; the fact that you took a romance story and gave it a different twist than is usually seen on here was asdfjkl. You have good vocabulary and you are able to write descriptively and not sound rambly. Only thing I would work on is at times in a few chapters, is that the character sounded a bit formal and she's a teenager, so it didn't quite "fit". But, maybe that's how she speaks :) Anyways, awesome story and I will be looking forward to reading more~

So, I liked this. :) But at the same time, at some points, I thought it sounded too sophisticated. I mean, don't get me wrong. I really liked this and didn't want to stop reading it. I just think some things could've been worded differently. But besides that, this was really good, and I would actually reread this, like I do with a lot of books. :)

I finished this in one day annnnd I FREAKING LOVED IT. I wish there were more stories like this with a lot of romance but still good action and mystery~ I would have never thought Nixon was a bad guy D:

But I was okay with it because of NOAH <3 I have a huge crush on him. Like I literally sat in class today and thought of him LOL

So thanks for writing this story and for making Noah <3

So far I've gotten to chapter 8 and I must say I am intrigued with this story! X3 its very well written and I love the characters! I really like Nixon! I'm excited to read the rest! X3

Very good!! :D

I loved it!! And I also loved the last lines! <3

I like Noah but I really liked Nixon!! :(
But still.. this is amazing, I can't wait to read the ending! I wonder how this will turn out!

Wow, it's almost done? Awesome, it's a great feeling finishing a book. :D

So firstly, congrats on almost finishing this.

I notice that this has already been stated, watche the use of I's it's orrery excessive.

I like the idea though, really, congrats. :)

Paige
You're very rude.

Well this is. Ur plot line moves to fast and does t explain very well. Noah is making out with her after he frickin kidnaps her very smooth transition. This story bull

OMG. I just read that whole story right now. I LOVE IT! OMFG! <3

Ok either Noah or Nixon she's lookin like a slut now

The first chapter was brilliant!! I love your writing style. Good job!!!

>_> He better not be dead.

Also..... D: <---That's for the cliff hanger!!

Although I have only read a few chapters of this story, I can honestly say that this is a really good story. I really like your writing style; you have made Casey into someone real, that I can relate to just by the description, and the way she talks.

What bothered me a little bit, was that in the second chapter, you began a lot of paragraphs with I. Maybe try experimenting with different words or try beginning sentences or paragraphs with actions.

I like the amount of detail verses dialogue. You distribute both evenly within each chapter, which is awesome. Overall, the few chapters that I read were amazing!

I love your updates!

I liking Noah a lot:D there was great emotion in this chapter, keep it up!!

I like this one a lot. *subscribes* :D

This is cool. Please write more.

I love people who think they're the police of the internet. It would've been a lot more polite to send that in a message instead of posting it up and making the author look like a thief. Seriously, grow up.

Stunning story. <3