Pointy Fucking Shoes - Comments

Holy. Shit. I don't even know where I should start! This is by far, the best Ryden story I've read tonight, and I've read a lot thanks to this new comment swap. But just.... wow. It was hot. It was crazy. It was gorgeous. I can't even think of anything else to say. It's just.... woah.

That was AMAZING. I loooveloveloved this, so hot, so REAL.

omfg.
Why has this been all my life???
That has got to be the hottest damn buttsecks ever.
EVER.
Um, there's this Brendon story that I read that I think you'll like.
Just, like, wait?
Anyway, that was... afjvndjfvnakdjf.
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It was nasty and haunting, but the ending gave it a nice light loving outlook. With all that chaotic sex, there is still a strong element of affection and a strange beauty. I really liked it on many different levels. Bravo.

Story Review Game:

First off, the summary is wonderful - attention grabbing, interesting, simple and to the point.

They eat it up, the mysterious aura, the lying bullshit, the what-the-fuck-do-you-care obviousness. Nobody gives a fuck about the name. They’re all there for one reason. They’re all there to remove clothes and touch skin and get off as quickly as possible.
- I love the rawness and reality of this entire paragraph. I can tell already that I'm going to enjoy your writing style :)

But Ryan doesn’t appreciate it enough to kiss Brendon and tell him that everything is wonderful and that, yes, he would love to be his boyfriend. Because the thrill of walking into a club in four-inch heels is too much to give up.
- I love the way you've developed Ryan's character. He's so real to me and I love that about him.

I really enjoy how you're creating Ryan and Brendon's relationship. The lines in the relationship are drawn very clear and it's nice to see that.

And Brendon grabs Ryan’s face with his hand. Hard. “Knock it off.” Eyes are hard, dark. Jaw is set. He’s pissed. “There’s nothing wrong with your fucking shoes, Ry.”
- It's nice to see that there's more then meets the eye with Brendon. I had percieved him as being the calmer of the two boys, but as I read on, you introduce a new side to him - a darker side.

Your sex scene was written wonderfully. Although I will admit - not so much into the slash here - still, I know a good piece of writing when I see one, and this was one.

And Brendon nods, lays Ryan down, holds him until he falls asleep. Then he gets up and starts to get dressed. The sound of his shoes on the floor cause the older boy’s eyes to flutter open. “Where you goin’?”

“Home.”

Ryan shakes his head sleepily. “Stay.”

So Brendon stays.
- I am completely in L.O.V.E with the ending. God, I loved this entire piece.

Overall, this is such an amazing little ditty. You had me with every word, every description. You have such an intriguing and capturing writing style and I really did like this piece. I hope this review did it justice.

Jesus, you never cease to amaze me. Everything you write is genius; thank you.

That was amazing and unlike anything I've ever read before. I loved it!

New oneshot.
Inspired by a line from 'Woe' by Say Anything.
I can't get laid in this town without these pointy fucking shoes.
~3100 words.
Ryden.
Cross-dressing and BDSM themes.

Happy [?] reading!

xoxox
-Dru