well I like the plot line, and the vocabular y is ok, though you could make it more variated Maybe describie more of the bridge, the waters sulkin the last of the character away, more methaphores maybe Its ok
October 20th, 2007 at 11:18am
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Maybe describie more of the bridge, the waters sulkin the last of the character away, more methaphores maybe
Its ok