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  • still waters;

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    I really liked that. It was very well written and described. But the best part? It's so realistic. Almost anyone can relate to this one-shot: Thinking nonstop about someone who doesn't even realize you exist, loving someone who doesn't even know you exist. It's everywhere in High School. Sad, but true.

    This was so beautifully written, you've got talent. Well done. :)
    January 26th, 2011 at 01:34am
  • Katelyn23

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    I usually don't read one-shots in letter form but I really liked this one. The amount of emotion that you poured in to it made it feel so real. I also like the way it sounds like someone honestly pouring their heart out instead of something that is too formal.
    October 4th, 2010 at 06:13am
  • hopes anchor

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    This was so good :)
    It was more casual, like a conversation. And not too fluffed up.
    It was very raw and to the point, and I loved that.

    I love all of the emotion that you put into it as well.
    And you did so well describing it, and how everything happened.

    Very well done :)
    September 26th, 2010 at 07:57am
  • losing control.

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    I really like how this was so real and relatable.
    Your writing seemed almost..poetic at times. It painted a picture in my mind, like I could see everything happening.
    It made me sad, I almost felt like crying, but that's good.
    I really liked it.
    Good job (:
    September 11th, 2010 at 08:46am
  • roux.

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    Okay, all I could think was; this writer's felt this pain before. She's writing about it so well and now, I'm starting to feel the hurt too.

    It takes a good writer to paint a picture, so indelibly, in her readers' minds. It takes a great writer to takes those pictures and spin them into her readers' emotions.

    This was a heart wrenching read. Great job.
    September 9th, 2010 at 07:56am
  • OH MY GAGA!

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    I really liked it! I thought it showed the one sided feelings that everyone has |:
    I wanted to read more (x
    September 8th, 2010 at 09:07am
  • Dr.

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    I can relate to this, oddly enough. I've been heartbroken and I know about the hurt and the shock and disbelief. You portrayed it very nicely in this piece; raw emotion and nothing but. Beautiful.

    Very well done.

    Dr.
    September 8th, 2010 at 06:22am
  • mazohyst

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    If it hurts this much, then it must be love.
    I loved that line! It had so much truth to it.
    You have a lovely way of portraying emotions. It was very detailed, and the emotions were just so real. Good job! ^^
    August 29th, 2010 at 09:33pm
  • Acid Milk

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    The way that you can write so well, and have so much emotion oozing from the words, simply blows me away. :)
    August 29th, 2010 at 09:18pm
  • not here anymore

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    That was great!
    It was so descriptive and detailed and dramatic, but totally believeable at the same time! It was awesome, seriously. I was wrapped up in it the entire time.
    I'm going to look at your other stuff later on:]
    August 28th, 2010 at 04:38am
  • prettylame87

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    I can feel the emotion. This is very good.
    August 28th, 2010 at 03:23am
  • Patty Lovell

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    But if the wind blows your way, I won’t hate you. I´ll know how to lose.

    Favorite line <3

    Anyways, I very much enjoyed this. And it's easy to relate to, and just all in all very raw and powerful.

    To sum it up, I loved it. And I'm going to read more of your stories after I eat this Nutella. :3

    Well done.
    August 24th, 2010 at 08:30am
  • Jesus Christ

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    I thought it was very touching. I can relate to all of those things, and I particularly liked the bit about hoping you two were listening to the same song. I thought it was sincere and it felt real which made the writing seem more real.
    August 7th, 2010 at 03:59am
  • pocahontas.

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    If it hurts this much, then it must be love.
    This was simply amazing.
    It was really good, and I can totally relate to this. Please don't ever delete this, because I love it.
    Keep up the good work.

    Xxoo,
    Bridgette
    August 7th, 2010 at 03:50am
  • Monsters.

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    This was really good and I'm glad you entered it. I could relate to it a lot and it made me remember similar times. Very well written. :)
    January 30th, 2010 at 05:21am