Mannequin - Comments

Wow, this was really cool! Like everyone else, I didn't expect it to be John's lover that stopped by to offer her condolences to Harlow, but I guess that's what makes it so great, right? ;-) Also the comparison to the girls being hollow and fake like the mannequins in the windows was just so awesome. I'd been wondering where and how the title of the story was going to fit in right up until the very end when it was revealed and I just loved it.

I loved reading this. I hope you won that contest!

^ Ava's right.

You. are. so. amazing. <3 xD

Dude.
You. are. amazing.<3
This is pure genius and awesomeness. <3
Like always I love your detail.(:
It took me a minute to realize this had swtiched points of view, but the information revealed by that simple switch made my stomach drop.
Just amazingness.(: <3
Lovely, lovely job.(:

This was really great (: Hope you won this! <3

Oh , wow. I didn't expect that to be Melissa telling her sorry for her loss. Oh, my gosh. Wow. I wonder what would happen if sh would have confessed. Probably a royal smack down, maybe?

Also: Those two girls might’ve looked like they were living a good life, that they had it all—but both girls were, in reality, as hollow and fake as the fucking mannequins in the shop windows behind them.

I really liked that ending part. I loved that comparison to the mannequins.

Those two girls might’ve looked like they were living a good life, that they had it all—but both girls were, in reality, as hollow and fake as the fucking mannequins in the shop windows behind them.

Great, great last line. This was an excellent one-shot.

It was so easy to read. It wasn't cluttered with unnecessary detail, and it flowed beautifully from one idea to the next.

I loved that you got to peer into both minds, and I loved that the girl who wasn't engaged to John was more emotionally attached to him. That really paints a picture of how Harlow and John's relationship was.

Really well done, I really enjoyed it. I'll be posting the winners of the contest later today!

very well writen. good luck! :]

I liked it! It was well writen and a great stroy!!!