Reincarnation - Comments

This story is deffinetly unique, and I really like your use of suspended sentences. Sylvia Plath does the same thing in The Bell Jar and its really effective in creating suspense and emphasizing thoughts and feelings. So well done; I've only read the first chapter so far but the sense of mystery you have created is highly commendable.
I think you should try and extend your vocabulary a bit though. If you type your stories on word, you may or may not know that there's a really useful synonym tool. All you have to do is right click on the word you want to cahnge and an option for synonyms should come up. Sorry if you knew that already.
Great first chapter, I shall now go on to read the rest :]

This story is very interesting.

Wow, this is pretty impressive; however I have a niggle, you font colour needs to be changed; it's too dark to the wording without highlighting it. (I noticed this from you asking for advice on getting comments for your stories, just whore yourself shamelessly. I might do that as well, but laziness stops me. :))

This is magnificent!

I totally love it!!

You must update as soon as possible, I wanna know what happens to her! I love the way you write, it's like your right there having an aerial view of everything that's happening. I L-O-V-E it!!!!

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With a destination so sweet,
But the demolition is tearing me,
To pieces.