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  • Deceptive Cadence

    Deceptive Cadence (100)

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    I was just rereading this. It was even more amazing the ten-millionth time through. =)

    I can't stop. I'm addicted to this oneshot!
    January 26th, 2008 at 05:25am
  • The One Who's Asleep

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    ohmawgod izzy!!!! this is like incredible! i love how use the words "cherry-red'. it just seems so you and it added a really nice touch. the difference in the scents of the bakery and the beer were great too.
    October 26th, 2007 at 01:18am
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    aw, thanks :)
    October 25th, 2007 at 09:30am
  • Deceptive Cadence

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    WOW. This is probably my favorite one shot of yours. (If it is a one shot...)

    I love this line so much

    Instead, the tires of your cherry-red Miata flew against the brown slush on the edges of the street, and it whirled and danced and landed somewhere else.

    It's so simple and so amazing. Every line is just so descriptive and effortless. Clap
    October 25th, 2007 at 09:18am
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