December 16th, 2014 at 11:54am
Wow! That was really good. The imagery and the detail put into the story just sucked you in but it still kept a large amount of mystery. No gramatical errors or spelling ones which makes me love it do much more!
My one complaint would be that I want there to be more! It makes me want to know what happens next!!! Awesome! Great job!
Everything he does just adds to this guy's character. This could be written about a real person and I wouldn't bat an eyelid. What I really love is how the narrator talks about it though - you can feel him trying to disconnect from Lawson with an almost clinical narration but ending up failing miserably because love and stuff and it's simply gorgeous. Honestly, this is one of the best stories I've read on Mibba. Really, really beautiful.
Good luck in the contest!