Don't Fall. - Comments

Wow. I can't even begin to fathom how you're going to follow this up.

It grips you right from the beginning, and honestly, it was amazing. The flow, the articulation, the general emotion in it, was so powerful, i'm having trouble elaborating on how much i admired this piece of writing, because what i'm saying is selling it short.

so, i'mma keep it simple. this was gorgeous.

Wow, I was really pulled in by this story, and felt like I was right there with the girl on the ledge.
You were so descriptive, but still left room for the imagination.
I really could see it being played out like a short film in my head.
I'm so intrigued by it. I can't wait to find out what happens.
Bravo.

This isn't the sort of thing I'd usually read, but I can safely say I'll be reading more in the future. This was easily one of the most beautiful pieces of writing I've seen in a long, long time. You use such gorgeous language, and all the descriptions flow together perfectly. I could just see it all happening, in her head, in real life, and it was so beautiful yet heartbreaking at the same time. It's so difficult to write this, because I really don't know how I can put all of my emotions into words. But it touched me. Thank you for writing this. You're a wonderful author.

This is amazing.
Your description is perfect - it's beautiful and detailed, without coming off as flowery and unnecessary.
It is certainly an unusual narration, but it will be really interesting to see where the second part takes us.
It is short, but you've somehow portrayed so much emotion, and you really connect with this mystery character, particularly towards the end.
I like the opening two paragraphs best, I think, the first sentence especially. It just draws you straight in. When the writing's as good as this, long introductions are unnecessary, so you've handled it perfectly.

Wow. This is amazing and well written.
It's dark, yet beautiful and highly impressive.
It's deep and intellegent.
It is amazing.

bb, your stories are so beautiful.
this one's no exception.

it's so descriptive & full of inner turmoil.
it takes my breath away.

gorgeous. :3