Bebe - Comments

With each piece of work I read from you, I adore your writing even more.

I love the idea. Love the description. Your use of synonyms, and just... the entire story overall.

Honestly, I really liked the fact that she refused to leave instead of jumping for joy at the prospect of living in America. That made it realistic, and I loved it.

Only again, silence befriended the room.

Beautiful.
Simply beautiful.

... I don't have much to go on since it's only a chapter long. But I shalt subscribe, since this is... simply incredible.

Your descriptions are beautiful to be honset , despite their simplicity.
Pamela's outrage was fairly understandable. Also, her love for her husband protruded thoughout the chapter.

Only again, silence befriended the room.
I loved that simile/ending. Because truthfully I bust my hump trying to word out silence differently every time.Maybe I'll steal this one :shifty

I can't find any mistakes whatsoever. I'm looking forward to see what happens.

Wow! That's all I can say about this. I felt like Pamela. I could feel everything and see everything that she saw. Very good. I hope to read more if you are going to write more soon. Very nice.

Very good. I never seen a story touch on this subject before, so that's good and you already know I love everything you do =]

ILY.

I like this. It's very different, and we don't get very many original stories on here. Please update soon?
xoxo

Wow, your words and descriptions really put the image of the whole scene into my head.
(yeah, I read this 'cos the MCR one was a tad too long for my time)
Wonderful job, I'll be subscribing.

Great job Karen.
I love your stories,
this one makes me really imagine i am right there.
I am Subscribing.
=]
Update soon plz.

AWESOME! Update soon? (:

You describe really vibrantly, it really gives a sense of...being where the story is (Had a word but forgot it, unfortunately)

Subscriber.