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  • akasagarbha

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    With each piece of work I read from you, I adore your writing even more.

    I love the idea. Love the description. Your use of synonyms, and just... the entire story overall.

    Honestly, I really liked the fact that she refused to leave instead of jumping for joy at the prospect of living in America. That made it realistic, and I loved it.

    Only again, silence befriended the room.

    Beautiful.
    Simply beautiful.

    ... I don't have much to go on since it's only a chapter long. But I shalt subscribe, since this is... simply incredible.
    October 31st, 2007 at 05:59am
  • Heartswell.

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    Your descriptions are beautiful to be honset , despite their simplicity.
    Pamela's outrage was fairly understandable. Also, her love for her husband protruded thoughout the chapter.

    Only again, silence befriended the room.
    I loved that simile/ending. Because truthfully I bust my hump trying to word out silence differently every time.Maybe I'll steal this one :shifty

    I can't find any mistakes whatsoever. I'm looking forward to see what happens.
    October 31st, 2007 at 12:50am
  • Fueled By Dana

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    Wow! That's all I can say about this. I felt like Pamela. I could feel everything and see everything that she saw. Very good. I hope to read more if you are going to write more soon. Very nice.
    October 30th, 2007 at 09:17am
  • dr. faustus

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    Very good. I never seen a story touch on this subject before, so that's good and you already know I love everything you do =]

    ILY.
    October 27th, 2007 at 10:56am
  • Jepha Howard.

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    I like this. It's very different, and we don't get very many original stories on here. Please update soon?
    xoxo
    October 27th, 2007 at 05:56am
  • Clowns.

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    Wow, your words and descriptions really put the image of the whole scene into my head.
    (yeah, I read this 'cos the MCR one was a tad too long for my time)
    Wonderful job, I'll be subscribing.
    October 27th, 2007 at 04:05am
  • Edward Cullen14

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    Great job Karen.
    I love your stories,
    this one makes me really imagine i am right there.
    I am Subscribing.
    =]
    Update soon plz.
    October 26th, 2007 at 11:38pm
  • wishfinder

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    AWESOME! Update soon? (:
    October 26th, 2007 at 09:53pm
  • Fat Lemon

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    You describe really vibrantly, it really gives a sense of...being where the story is (Had a word but forgot it, unfortunately)

    Subscriber.
    October 26th, 2007 at 07:18pm
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