Pros: Excellent. I enjoyed the "i hate valentines day" thing. Yet the both end up together. It was a good oneshot. Generic, but it fit it. The writing was excellent. I had a few giggle or two, and I enjoyed that. I'm glad you picked Zacky, he's one of my favorites!
Cons: Try a little more to break up the large paragraphs. One large one can become two medium and its much easier on the eyes. Makes you want to read it rather than skim it. Watch out for a few grammical errors.
Cons: Try a little more to break up the large paragraphs. One large one can become two medium and its much easier on the eyes. Makes you want to read it rather than skim it. Watch out for a few grammical errors.
Thanks for entering! Good luck!