Rapto - Comments

NICe! :D

I really like it :) It's so emotional.

This is definitely not what I expected (in a totally good way).
When I saw that there would be some explicit content I was expecting vulgar language and disgustingly graphic scenes, but this the complete opposite.
You've written this so eloquently and you've developed a harsh and real world that is interesting to read about. I also enjoy how you don't describe the graphicness the sex, yet we still know it takes place.

This is very interesting, and I'm definitely going to keep my eye on it and see where it goes (:

First off, I really love your layout. It's simple... and cute.

But, anyways. Your summary was really great. That statistic you put, literally made my jaw drop. Not kidding. I just couldn't believe it. In a really dark way, I found something you wrote in your summary kind of funny. When you warned about a reality check, I kind of chuckled. And I feel really bad about it.

In the first chapter, I was kind of confused. Okay, I was really confused. But as I made it to later chapters, I wasn't so confused. It all made sense.

I love the way you use your adjectives. You give just enough detail to let the mind wonder, yet you set my mind in the right direction. Do I make sense? You gave me enough detail to let me picture my own scene.

You had a few grammar errors, but nobody's perfect.

I do have a complaint though. Well, more of a confusion. I was confused at how in the first chapter you wrote that Erica can go back to her house in the morning, but in chapter two and three, you said that all the prostitutes live at a whore house. I was kind of confused.

I love that you didn't use too much detail in the sexual scenes. You barely used any, and it was a good thing. It wasn't awkward at all.

You were right, you gave me a reality check, and a big one at that. You made me realize that bad things can be happening right before me. It really woke me up.

I loved how short your chapters were, they were the perfect length. They were short and to the point, and that was probably the best thing.

A thing I noticed that kind of got on my nerves was that the way you spaced everything. In some paragraphs you would only press enter once, and in others, there was this big huge gap between paragraphs.

Well. I loved it, and please update soon.

love this!!!

I really like this story!makes me wanna cry but i like it:)
i really like your writing style too ^_^

Your writing style is so professional! Did you make his apperance vauge as to say that this happens all over the world with men from many walks of life? Just a guess there. Please update frequently this story is the most intresting I've read in a while so continue on!

Brilliant chapter. I feel so attached to the characters, and it's horribile what they're going through. You make everything so realistic, it seems as if you're standing right there watching everything happen. Which, in my opinion, is what makes reading something worth while. The chance to be taken away from where you are and into another world, even if it's to a world like this one.
Amazing work, and probably the least cliche read I've seen in a while, I can't wait for the next update.

Wow, great concept. Your prologue was really quite eloquent, especially that bit about their clothes dropping to the floor with their dignity. And the title is also incredibly apt.

In the first chapter, your first two paragraphs aren't separated properly- there's just a line missing that was probably a typo. This chapter was incredibly short, but I think that the way you did it, that wasn't a bad thing. I also really liked this line:

Her life changed three years, two abortions, twenty eight beatings, and an innumerable amount of men after she started working the streets.

I feel that by the second chapter, there is a lot of detail to this world, and that made it quite engaging to read. You paint a vivid picture of horrendous situation, and you manage to do that in not very many words, which I think is commendable.

You seem to have a very large vocabulary, and your descriptions are for the most part very colourful. There are just a few -eg. 'Looking horrified' (third chapter), that are unspecific. That said said however, while every action and emotion presents an opportunity to be descriptive, you're certainly not obliged to be any more verbose than you want to. It's just a suggestion.

Overall, I think this is a well-written story with an original plot.

Keep going!

This is really interesting and eye opening, it makes me sad to think there really are girls out there who have to deal with this everyday :(
I liked how you didn't describe everything that he was doing, a lot of authors do that and it makes the piece seem to emotional - not describing it shows how removed from the situation she is and how she doesn't want it.
Keep it up!!

I'm looking forward to where this story goes :)
Update soon!!

I really liked this story. It was descriptive in a cold and eye opening way. It makes you think. I actually tried out a story very similar to this. It dealt with trafficking, just like this. I just haven't gotten the motivation to update it recently. But your story is excellent. You have an awesome writing style. I can't wait for the next chapter. I subscribed.

GAHHHHHH!!!!!! I WAS RAPED!!!!! AND IM REALLY UGLY NOW!!!!!
(my name is erica)
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
:)
btw i luv the story, and i have no idea why the mans appearance was vague

Wow! This story is really well thought out. Please update. :]

HI!!!!! i really like the story, its great, plz update!!!!!!