This is really good. The storyline for this is quite different, which is good. The writing skill shown here is great. The emotios really jumped out at you. This is a very heartfelt stroy. Be proud of it.
You should get first place. Just sayng I mean I'm in the same contest but the imagery was so good on this. I could practically feel his anxiety and emotion. It was great.
I'm one of the judges for this story.
This is really good. The storyline for this is quite different, which is good.
The writing skill shown here is great. The emotios really jumped out at you.
This is a very heartfelt stroy.
Be proud of it.
Well done :)