Valentine - Comments

OUCH. GOD DAMN. I really liked that though. It was short but it packed a punch. Also I'm really noticing a theme with you and past tense/present tense story-telling, hahaha.

HEY FUCK YOU THEY WILL ALWAYS LOVE EACH OTHER
lol
I'm reading all your stories
it's great

my heart hurts ):
but this was beautifully written.

awww no, jack why did you leave Alex!!?? :'(
sadly my bloody heart ached when i read this, haha, still is
was really nice tho xx <33

omg i'm crying.
the last line, omg.
BAWWWWWWWWWWWWWW.

Oh my, this made me cry quite a bit :'(
Poor Alex
Well done, it was really good
<3
xx

Valentine’s Day used to be something that Alex looked forward to.

I love how the first line immediatly catches the readers attention. Your paragraphing and grammar was amazing and description, wow. That's all I can use to describe it at this moment. You kept the readers attention from beginning to end and, though it was sad and I wanted to cry, I just couldn't stop reading! I like how you went back and forth between the past and present, though your past and present tense could use a bit of work, like in the line; He knows he sort of looks like a fish, the way he keeps opening his mouth to speak, but he doesn’t care. instead of keeps, it should be kept. You should continue this, make it into a short story in a way.
:D
I know I would continue reading it! Keep up the awesome work!

So sad. ):

I almost cried. ): awwh. Poor Alex. ):

So good, but so sad.

Awh. D:
I wish you gave more insight on who Jack's 'someone else' is and what's in his bag. Seriously! Alex kept staring at it, it got me curious too. D:
And I loved that part when you said 'and that's what breaks him' or something. That phrase is just awesome. x]

This is sad, but so well written.
Alex needs a hug. I'm going to find him and give him one.
Jack is going to die for being an asshole, I'll make sure of it.
This gives me more reason to dislike Valentine's Day. I've never really liked that holiday to begin with...
Anywho, I love this =D

ohmygoodness
i cried D:
and it was written so well
and this was so amazing
and
aaaah D: i feel so bad for Lexy now.
i just want to give him a hug.
and i want to
punch Jack in the face
for being such a dick.
i loved this. :)

soo sad!! :(
but it was really well written, I really liked it!