Rock Star Love - Comments

awwwwww poor gee

Loved that! Its not stereotypical [I'm not against stereotypical stories but a change is nice] and its well written too!
i suscribed a while ago but forgot to read it. You know, when you find something you like so you suscribe then forget about it? So the email was like, "Actually read it now, you Retard!"

Update it please!
Well, when you can...
-grins-

You changed pov in the middle of the chapter.
O_O.

It was like.. Gerard pov, then you said "Gerard called out my name softly" or something. lol.

anyways, good update.
Remove your authors notes though.

omg that is awsome................u should definatly write some more very soon! :D
wow, i've read two stoiries and i remeber both of them! lol
well, i have to go out............*huggs*
xoxoxoxo
billy

-giggles-

woah, i giggle a lot with this story.
yepyep.
and that's a good sign.
(:

updateeeeeeeeee.

Mindfreak.:

frankieeee!
i love frankiee.
(:

you should update, cause you so left us hanging there.

...shit, that sentence shows up alot on my story comments.
-giggles-

<3

i loved it and i agree 100% with the updating part
XD

frankieeee!
i love frankiee.
(:

you should update, cause you so left us hanging there.

...shit, that sentence shows up alot on my story comments.
-giggles-

<3

very good, im shocked it only has 3 comments.
pleas dont let that bring you down, please update soon

Yay!
you've got it!

-hugs-

butbut.
change this:


"You Shut up, I'm, trying to listen." I say shushing Mikey as I watch Frank move around the tv scream, singing his heart out
Your love stings like poison
Bringing me down on my knees.
He sings, falling down on too his knees.
"What is up with your obsessions with him?" Say's Mikey ignoring my plea for him to shut up.

to this:

"You Shut up, I'm, trying to listen." I say shushing Mikey as I watch Frank move around the tv scream, singing his heart out.

Your love stings like poison, bringing me down on my knees.

He sings, falling down on too his knees.

"What is up with your obsessions with him?" Says Mikey, ignoring my plea for him to shut up.

^___^

anyways.
update soon?
(:

Sounds good so far.
But I have to mention one thing.
Grammar.

zomfg.
lol

Not too bad, but I need you to do one thing or I won't be able to read it
(seriously, this one thing bugs the hell out of me)

Every time someone new talks in the story, start a new paragraph, or skip two lines. Know what I mean? Go take a look at some of my chapters if you don't know what I'm talking about.

Anyways, the storyline seems good, I've only seen about one or two others something like it, so that's points for originality.

(:

But yeah, keep working on it, and fix the paragraph form and you should bee good!

<3