Demons In My Head - Comments

Um, wow! Brilliant! Brilliantly written and very interesting to read! I enjoyed it very much! It was easy to read and really interesting. It also wasn't typical or cliche at all. That's something I very much enjoyed. It was original and captivating really.

Oh, and the phobia is suppose to say Mental Institution. My mistake.

Congradulations! You have won first place in my phobia contest. Here is what you have won:

* Three banners for three individual stories of yours
* A link on my profile for two months
* A link on my signature for two months
* Comment on as many stories/ one shots of yours

(Message me about the banner information and what stories/ one-shots you want me to comment on. This one-shot did not count against the comments.)

I have to say, that really was a good one-shot. It really captured the affects someone could have from schizophrenia. Well, now I will start with the review.

Title:

I really liked the title. It kind of gave a name for Cerberus, or that is what I thought. It really captured my attention on what the one-shot was going to be about.

Layout:

Original layout. Very nice! I like how the layout is easy to read but without too distracting to the eye.

Summery/ Explanation:

Since it wasn’t really a summery, only an explanation, I will call it both. I liked how you explained what schizophrenia was without getting to technical. You kept it so anyone would know the basics of it but at the same time, made it so people could understand it, like me.

Bonus for putting everything I asked in the summery. :]

Content:

I loved the idea of her having this one friend, Cerberus. Of course, the story did explain the main character, Adalyn, having schizophrenia. But, I loved how you explained when she first went to the doctor and why she went. I thought it was very believable.

What I thought was good about this one-shot was that Cerberus was able to persuade Adalyn into doing everything he said. He was controlling her and she, well what I think, couldn’t get away from what he said and make her own decisions.

Overall:

I thought this was a magnificently written one-shot! It kept my attention through the whole thing and the ending was completely unexpected to me. Although the ending was sad, the story behind it was good.