The Stopwatch - Comments

i have to agree with so sedated.'s first sentence.
I'm sorry it's taken me so long to get around to this. I know you've probably thought that I had forgotten about giving this a comment as one of your prizes, but i really haven't. I kept putting it off (again, I'm sorry) because I haven't had a lot of time to read lately in my life. Bad excuse, I'm aware, but at least I'm here now.

Anyways, I really loved all the detail behind this. It was terrifically descriptive and the attention to such precise things as seconds and inches really added a level of deepness to it. The fact that nothing was really 'on the hour' or anything like that was a great part of the overall thought process of Michael, which your narrator really brought through quite amazingly. I was thoroughly blown away by all the detail and the meticulous additives you've scattered all throughout the piece. Absolutely wonderful job on this, and I only hope you keep up your writing. Because, dear, you rock my world when I read your stories.

Sorry about my delayed judging of this. : /

I loved the detail in and the precyse-ness of it and how the time is the exact time and you aren't rounding it off. I loved the ending it was good. It was sinister and suspencful. I really have to say that I quite loved this. It was fascinating and it was described well, along with your amazing way with words.

Good job and good luck! :D

I absorbed every word you wrote, this was a very good read!
Many people are afraid to use 'big words', and just stick to the basics, but you were very descriptive... and let's just say the vocabulary wasn't limited.

Overall, great job. c:

It sucks!

No, not really. I'm just kidding. This is really cool actually.

You've done a fantastic job at selecting numbers to incorporate throughout your story.
Most people would have just said "6:00" but instead you've wrote "5:56" which is a great way of making the story appear more realistic. Too bad there's only three chapters; I really enjoyed it. ( I hope I made sense. I don't often. XD )

wow i really really liked this. i love the way you interracted with the reader. the way it is written is amazing and i loved the suspense and Michael Bjorman is a very intresting charecter. great story, keep writing! ;)

Sometimes the best stories are the ones that don't need to lay everything out on the table. I love how you left a subtle, suspenseful ending and let the reader's imaginations do the rest of the work. I think Michael Bjorman could be a really interesting character to further follow; his compulsion to count, his need to kill... Both very fascinating points.

Anyway, I just want to say that I really enjoyed reading this. You have a wonderful way with words and your phrases and metaphors are very original. It's not the same old thing written a million times over. It's unique.

wow...u are really good!..and i'm not just saying that.
i loved it....i loved the suspense, the writing style, especially the way u left the reader wondering...
it provoked a lot of thought....for me at least.
very very nice :]
thanx 4 commenting on my story btw :]

It's good and freaky
I'd say you should write more :)