Love Game - Comments

Aww, I just read this whole story and I wanna sequel!!!!

Awww so cuteee <3 :)
Made me laugh pretty hard :)

I love the rewrite of chap. 11! that was cool. And the ending was cool too I like how u had Nico do the whole DVD thing. I'm gonna miss this story now that it's over.

I have only read the first chapter but I generally like it. Although, you could add a little more detail about the game show (in the first chapter). It was all a little confusing reading it, but I understood it as well as I could. I am going to read more of this story, but I am too tired and am going to bed.

But, I pinky swear that I will read more and give you a better review when I can!

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there r 2!!!

omg put a pic of ben up! i wanna see ben! and btw i agree with the person rite above this comment!

Alright, if you want a comment so bad here it is: the story is cliche and predictable. The villain, Bernice, is the worst of them all. Most women are not that dumb when they are trying to win a man. They will be devious whores and I bet most of the time it works because they know how to play the game. You should make Bernice have some sort of master plan that have been the reason why she has stayed the whole time, and maybe make her more realistic so that Nico might actually want to pic her in the end because as it stands right now we all know what is going to happen.

Nevaeh is a Mary-Sue, point blank. Where are her character flaws? She needs to be like klutzy or have a short fuse, her fuse in this case does not stay consistent, if she really did not want to be there I am sure that there would have been plenty of other girls that they could have chosen to take her place. Plus she could have played pranks on Nico or Adam, she could have done a whole hell of a lot more to try and get herself kicked off because at some point she would have said, "Ok, that's it!" and pull out the big guns.

Nico is also a cliche character. I guess people find it hard to make lead males into something other than cliche because I feel that most fictional males are romanticized. I know you did put a little bit in there about him being in lust with Bernice but you mentioned about one paragraph on it and it probably would have been more interesting if you would have followed up on that like say have Nico hit on Nevaeh and her reject him, which would make him want her more. Although that to is cliche it would be more consistent with the story.

And there you have it. a Short bit on my thoughts of the story.

Man i would have kicked Bernice's ass. She is such a stuck up barbie doll. lol Anyway i loved the chapter as always. =) And yay! more people are commenting! I'm sooooo happy!!!! (i guess my threating them with my chainsaw worked. lmao)

amazing! I really LOVE this story

Hey, my name's Nevaeh! Ha. This story is so cute! Keep up the good work :)

As a wonderful chapter, i can't wait for the next one.

love it=D
keep it up...i mean it because if you dont..well lets just say you dont wanna know!^.^
anyway..
-Fate

Love the story! Night is so adorable! Can't wait for the next chapter!

awww, Night is sooo cute! And it's so annoying me that only i have been commenting. I mean come on people Amrsmith deserves a little reconation and to hear from her readers. *threatens none commenters with a chainsaw.* Comment or i shall come after u!

Sweetness!!!! I can't wait for the next chapter and Night to come!

ROFL!!! omg that was hilarious! awesome chapter Amrsmith!

ROFL!!! omg that was hilarious! awesome chapter Amrsmith!

Heck yeah she should go. and it would be really funny if he said something to piss her off and she dumped her drink over his head. lol. (I actually did that to a guy once. It was hilarious)

rofl i love the cupcake part! soooo funny. And hey i have a big favor. If ur a fan of Harry Potter would u mind reading my stories and telling me what u think of them. Ur a really good author and i'd love to get ur opinion on how my stories.

This is an awesome story. I will work on a banner for u when i get time. Right now im kinda busy cuz im having to help out my Uncle who is going to be having surgery.