awww this is so cuuuuuute! I love the way you portrayed all of the characters, although I didn't like all the outfits. all in all I loved the story. check mine out if you'd like! I'm off to read your second one
I have only read the first two chapters, but this seems pretty good. So I'm going to subscribe and continue to read.
I'll read it later cause right now I'm so tired. However you have a smooth, short, sweet kind of writing style. And I like that, so hopefully the rest of the story will be good. =)