I absolutly adore this story. It is such a creative way to introduce the characters not only to each other but the reader as well. I find myself as eager as Lenny or Tom to read the replies. Keep up the great work, I hope to see more of the story!
Ooh, I wonder why I didn't comment. ._. This was written really well and does catch the eye. However, I spotted a few spelling mistakes here and there that you must be careful of. Also, on a lighter point I really like the layout. Its soft on the eyes and doesn't crowd up most of the page. Very nice. You asked for feed back and I am giving you it, don't snap at me for it. Keep it up and update soon.