It's A Small World - Comments

i <3 it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I liked the first chapter. It was a good introduction, telling a bit about the character before the story started.

Your description was really good. Really showed what was happening.

His hair was mousey brown in colour and scruffy like he had just gotten out of bed. His face, usually warm and filled with colour was pale and cold this morning. It was the weather that was doing it to him.

That really made me picture what his face looked like.

His ears pricked up as he heard a voice call out. He glanced out the doorway. It was hard to see from the darkness, and the flickering of a nearby street lamp didn’t help, but from what he could make out there was a figure running towards the space craft.

That really made me picture what the setting looked like. It made it very clear.

No spelling mistakes or anything. You're a good writer. :)

vonny:

No! It's half three. ..That's what I say anyways. It's half ten. Half one.

...But yeah, you could say half past three. But, half three is niftier.

oO um. OK. What ever floats yer boat.

^^ Um.. I really liked it, too.

XD It was more of the fact that sitting with her might lead to something, and he didn’t want that.

That sentance made me laugh much.

Well done, Von. Keep it up.

Quite the nice update.

VONNNYYY.
Stop being pwnsome :]
As Liz said, if you were an author I'd queue up at your signings and be like "ZOMMGG !" and stuff :D
You are a very good writer XD

:cheese: :cheese: :cheese:

PWNING.

Pretty freakin good Vonny, I shall subscribe.

STFU Elmo.:

It reminds me of The Hitch-Hikers Guide To The Galaxy.

:file: I'm reading that right now. Good book.

Anyway, very well written. :tehe: It was dark.

But I was a bit confused at:
He stopped when he reached the corner of Johnston and Stuart Avenue and pulled back his sleeve to view the time. Half three. He was early.

Is it supposed to be half past three?

Yeahh.. Well, I love it, Vonny. 8) Can't wait for more.

No! It's half three. ..That's what I say anyways. It's half ten. Half one.

...But yeah, you could say half past three. But, half three is niftier.

It reminds me of The Hitch-Hikers Guide To The Galaxy.

:file: I'm reading that right now. Good book.

Anyway, very well written. :tehe: It was dark.

But I was a bit confused at:
He stopped when he reached the corner of Johnston and Stuart Avenue and pulled back his sleeve to view the time. Half three. He was early.

Is it supposed to be half past three?

Yeahh.. Well, I love it, Vonny. 8) Can't wait for more.

This is amazingly well written.
If you published, I'd totally buy your books and queue up obsessively at your book signings.

vonn this is awesome :D
The prologue gets people wanting to read more.
Can't wait for the update :]

I might have a chance to be recced by Mibba Radio! :cheese:

Wow, the detail! So good. It's really interesting..the last chapter captured me :omfg: It sounds really cool, I wanna know what happens next...wow, keep writing, it seems like a good idea especially from what I read in that last chapter. =]

You're right vonnifer, that prologue will keep readers hanging.

:cheese:

READERS LIKE ME!

Well, seeing as I already got a preview there's not much to saw. :file:

Except...
Excellent work, as always! Original, interesting and totally rad. 8)

PWNING.