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  • lovely little lonely

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    i <3 it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    February 22nd, 2008 at 04:30pm
  • Tre the Cool.

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    I liked the first chapter. It was a good introduction, telling a bit about the character before the story started.

    Your description was really good. Really showed what was happening.

    His hair was mousey brown in colour and scruffy like he had just gotten out of bed. His face, usually warm and filled with colour was pale and cold this morning. It was the weather that was doing it to him.

    That really made me picture what his face looked like.

    His ears pricked up as he heard a voice call out. He glanced out the doorway. It was hard to see from the darkness, and the flickering of a nearby street lamp didn’t help, but from what he could make out there was a figure running towards the space craft.

    That really made me picture what the setting looked like. It made it very clear.

    No spelling mistakes or anything. You're a good writer. :)
    December 14th, 2007 at 10:12am
  • cheer up charlie

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    vonny:
    No! It's half three. ..That's what I say anyways. It's half ten. Half one.

    ...But yeah, you could say half past three. But, half three is niftier.
    oO um. OK. What ever floats yer boat.

    ^^ Um.. I really liked it, too.

    XD It was more of the fact that sitting with her might lead to something, and he didn’t want that.

    That sentance made me laugh much.

    Well done, Von. Keep it up. Smiley
    November 8th, 2007 at 01:48pm
  • Silly_Girl

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    Quite the nice update.
    November 7th, 2007 at 06:41pm
  • Emma!

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    VONNNYYY.
    Stop being pwnsome :]
    As Liz said, if you were an author I'd queue up at your signings and be like "ZOMMGG !" and stuff :D
    You are a very good writer XD
    November 7th, 2007 at 02:14pm
  • The Brightside

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    :cheese: :cheese: :cheese:

    PWNING.
    November 7th, 2007 at 02:08pm
  • Silly_Girl

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    Pretty freakin good Vonny, I shall subscribe.
    November 5th, 2007 at 10:00am
  • vonny

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    STFU Elmo.:
    Shifty It reminds me of The Hitch-Hikers Guide To The Galaxy.

    :file: I'm reading that right now. Good book.

    Anyway, very well written. :tehe: It was dark.

    But I was a bit confused at:
    He stopped when he reached the corner of Johnston and Stuart Avenue and pulled back his sleeve to view the time. Half three. He was early.

    Is it supposed to be half past three?

    Yeahh.. Well, I love it, Vonny. 8) Can't wait for more.

    Tongue
    No! It's half three. ..That's what I say anyways. It's half ten. Half one.

    ...But yeah, you could say half past three. But, half three is niftier.
    November 5th, 2007 at 05:23am
  • cheer up charlie

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    Shifty It reminds me of The Hitch-Hikers Guide To The Galaxy.

    :file: I'm reading that right now. Good book.

    Anyway, very well written. :tehe: It was dark.

    But I was a bit confused at:
    He stopped when he reached the corner of Johnston and Stuart Avenue and pulled back his sleeve to view the time. Half three. He was early.

    Is it supposed to be half past three?

    Yeahh.. Well, I love it, Vonny. 8) Can't wait for more.

    Tongue
    November 4th, 2007 at 04:24pm
  • waiting_a_long_time

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    This is amazingly well written.
    If you published, I'd totally buy your books and queue up obsessively at your book signings.
    October 30th, 2007 at 05:15pm
  • Emma!

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    vonn this is awesome :D
    The prologue gets people wanting to read more.
    Can't wait for the update :]
    October 29th, 2007 at 04:03pm
  • vonny

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    I might have a chance to be recced by Mibba Radio! :cheese:
    October 29th, 2007 at 04:01pm
  • the surgeon.

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    Wow, the detail! So good. It's really interesting..the last chapter captured me :omfg: It sounds really cool, I wanna know what happens next...wow, keep writing, it seems like a good idea especially from what I read in that last chapter. =]
    October 29th, 2007 at 04:00pm
  • The Brightside

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    You're right vonnifer, that prologue will keep readers hanging.

    :cheese:

    READERS LIKE ME!

    Well, seeing as I already got a preview there's not much to saw. :file:

    Except...
    Excellent work, as always! Original, interesting and totally rad. 8)

    PWNING.
    October 29th, 2007 at 03:59pm
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