The Dream Isn't Done - Comments

AHHH My heart-CHAPTER 11! *faints*

Amazingly written. It's so hard to find a good story nowadays! I'm so glad I happened upon your story Universe, and now this!

You're right that all good things come to an end. But with difficulty comes ease, and there are more stories to write! :) Thankfully!

Take care!

My heart-Chapter 10-OUCH!

Okay...Chapter 5-I have more questions! :S. I hope they aren't too assuming or offensive, but this question or discussion has been on my mind for a long time. I just want to ask someone their perspective on this exact situation.

They are literally...doing exactly what he is saying they shouldn't do. Clothing wise, action wise, and they are just leaving one thing out. I think it's hypocritical that they are fully -almost-together but they can't be together (but they basically are in a state of undress and such That he states should be associated with marriage.) They shouldn't be doing all that they are in the first place then. Why layout the whole entire scene mister if you believe in God, shouldn't you fear God the second you take a woman out on a trip alone with you and the second you decide to undress and lie together. I don't get it. They're not stupid and they are adults. They've gone right into the situation to get to the limit. Why not stop beforehand and not get into the situation at all until you are married. Isn't all this sin too?? Shouldn't they be together only in this way when they are married? Aren't they living in sin RIGHT NOW? I don't understand these flimsy limits (and I'm not targetting you here...its this weird idea set up in our culture/movies/books).

If marriage is about being fully committed in the eyes of God, do they think God doesn't see all that they just did, that that should only be in marriage as well? Why are they fully together emotionally and basically physically AND not committed before God. Marriage is physical, but also EMOTIONAL, isn't it? That's why it's called soul mates, right? There's more than their bodies that are supposed to be together.

So before they get stuck together in a half-committed state where they have all the emotional components of their marriage relationship together, shouldn't they safeguard themselves and be ...i dunno a TAD modest? It seems to me that something is wrong here. Why should they come together fully emotionally if they can't physically. He should set the limits properly if he believes in being committed before God. Of course it's nice to see he has a limit, but I don't get it. Where was the limit when they got to know each other so completely and intimately that now...they are essentially stuck. They are in love, but sort of not. They don't know the extent of their relationship. They should've got married at the first signs so they would know the extent of their commitment to each other.
I'm sad :( he has sisters, wouldn't he hate if a guy got this close to his sister and was essentially fully connected with her emotionally but not committed to her before God. That just leaves a whole lot of room for emotional baggage if they ever leave each other.

I guess that's what I'm saying. It sucks to me that they have gotten to the point where there would be so much EMOTIONAL BAGGAGE if they leave each other. And the fact that they aren't married leaves them at that point of departure at any second. They have no "legal"commitment before God, so they are open to a lot of pain. And that is very very very sad, do you know what I mean? Does any of this make any sense to you, lol I know wrote a lot. What do you think?

Interesting, another man taking our unsuspecting MC on a worldwinding adventure, at least she knows him this time!!

Okay I have some questions/notes:
Chapter 3-she's drinking cocoa, it turns into coffee.
-he now owns the store that he randomly worked in for a few days and sells it? Please explain.
-if her french is not good, and he's the one whose french, why is she using it in every other sentence? Is she french? from Quebec?

I actually REALLY liked this story, thoroughly well written. (Y)
Good job. :D

This is amazing. But I'm confused. Did Alex die of a disease or what? I don't know what I'm saying, I know he died, but....hmmmm.

I do believe it is safe to say that I have fallen in love with this story, aha. <3
It is adorable so far and you pay amazing attention to the small details. (:
Stunning Job.

This story was so beautiful, and definately one of the best ones I have read on this sight. So heartbreaking, with a bitter/very sweet ending. <33333

This is brilliant.
I'm adding it to my list of recommended reads for summer 2010!
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This was just such a cute story.
I loved it so much!

Wow, that was just wow. Intense. It took me forever to finish, but alas. wow. I can't believe that. This was just amazing.

This story was amazingly cute and sad!
great work!!

Well, I read the first three chapters and I have to say that I enjoy this very much.
I love the flow of it and the style of writing you use.
And your vocabulary is superb.
So kudos on that.
Very nice job.

I meant to write though*

I just finished the story.

It was very cute, I loved it a lot. I wish you didn't kill off Alex thought =/.

I think I'll be reading more of your stories.

Story Review Game!

I had read this story a while back, but only the first chapter. I wanted to read the rest of it, so now I guess I get my chance. Chapter Two is the one I shall be reviewing for you today!

Layout: Simple and easy to read, which is always a plus to me. People who have over the top or hard to read layouts annoy me, so great layout.

Title: The Dream Isn't Done seems like a romantic fantasy kind of thing. Like maybe two star struck lovers had an amazing thing, but had to put it on hold for some reason. That's only a guess, but I shall read some more and find out.

Chapter:

The opening line So tell me darling, do you wish we'd fall in love? is super cute. I'm a hopeless romantic I guess. The icons are awesome as well especially the middle one, so pretty.

“Was he at least nice to look at?” Nadine asked as we browsed the shelves. haha, I can relate to Nadine. When my friends and I talk about boys and my friend didn't like whoever the guy was I always ask that. That part made me laugh, brownie points for a real life convo, haha! Cause some stories don't really have that touch, but that part made it super real.

“You’re never going to find a man around here who isn’t under the delusion that he’s God’s gift to all things female. It’s a fact.” That's so true, geez the guys at my shcool thing their God's, not gifts, but God's and its so ugh! Kudos to you for pointing out how annoying male egos are. Loved this line!

A Scottish accent was thick in his words and he smiled at me as he checked the price of the book. Men with accents are awesome! Haha.

This is really good so far, you are a very talented writer. I should really brush up on my skills, haha.

He looked at me simply. “You were loud. And this is a small store, miss.” This part made me laugh.

I met his gaze and he winked at me, taking my hand in his own murmured, “l’histoire de ma vie.” I loved the way the chapter ended, very cute story.

There are no spelling or grammar mistakes, you've seen to have gotten that all taken care of. You have a gift with writing and I really enjoyed this chapter. Wonderful job on it, girl!

Keep up the amazing work!

Aw! You named the baby after me!
<3 That does make up for killing him. I love you.
This story was amazing. You can bet whatever you start next, I'm going to be reading. It was written beautifully, so simple and just...easy to understand and read. You already knew how much I loved it.

Plus, I never got to say how much I liked those little icons you had at the beginning of every chapter. They always fit so well into the story.

Amazing job, I'm sad to see it go, but it was fantastic.

this story was absolutely wonderful. i hope you'll write more stories soon!

Such a cute, heart warming ending!

This is such an amazing story!
The emotion is amazing and I like the small parts in French.