I like your writing, truly I do. But the changes between point of views does get alittle 'bloop'. >.> But other than that, i cannot wait for another update.. Is this a love story or just about them being sucked into the Twilight world?...
hmm... i'm not a big fan of twilight but this is really good! Update soon!!
X_x '.Sk!ttlz.' x_X \/... A kiss goodbye ~ Your twisted shell ~ As rice grains and roses fall at your feet...\/ ^^My Chemical Romance;"Skylines and Turnstiles"^^