Intensified. - Comments

A very sweet, very nice story. I like the meaning behind it. It really brought out the reaction of 'Aww' in me. The only thing I disliked was that it was so short, but, I suppose, that was one of the things that made the story great.

The title, as ipod lover said reminded me of CSI. Very lovely story and please write more!(Preferably longer? lol =)

I'm not the biggest fan of the layout. I think you need to work a little more on it. I like the title; it reminds me of like a criminal investigation or something.

The boy stole her secret thinking spot? Ah, they're going to totally want each other.

The girl is afraid of water or something? I probably wouldn't go in the small pond either because I can't swim. >.<

I really like the fourth paragraph. It feels like it almost has a poetic tone with it due to your lovely description.
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Aww, this was really sweet. It was sort of unique that you didn't give neither character names; it sort of gives of a mysterious vibe to the whole thing. I'm glad they can share their secret thinking spot together; that's very sweet. And I like how the title ties in in the last paragraph. My predicament of the title use was totally off! Ah. Overall, this is a very nice piece.

~I'm judging for this contest~

Firstly: the rules. The link to my contest wasn’t there, the layout was okay; but the writing should’ve been brighter on the black background. Grammar-wise, there were quite a few slip-ups. Commas placed with a space either side of it, no space after a full-stop, ECT.

The writing was quaint. The idea was better. Improve your writing just a little and with the idea, it could really work a lot better.

I related to this as I have a thinking spot. I liked the quote about being alone in her own place, a lot of people, including myself, could relate to it:
“..so she could sing with passion and dance with soul. So that no one could witness her tears, or see who she was inside. So no one would be able to laugh..”

Well done! Be sure to keep checking the competition page for the results!

intense yo

Very well-written. You are very good at writing, quite talented =)
I enjoyed it, it's quite cute =P

That was fantastico! Brilliante! Another nice word pronounced spanish like! I lobed it!
You're so skilled :)
I'm jealous times ten. and a half.
right more stories or i'll kill you :D