The One Hiding Under Your Bed - Comments

Danke Frankie Shaii! =]
Your comment means the most to meee!!! =]

*Sakura-chan*

You know what?
I felt as though i was in the story, which... i am...but hopefully you know what i mean.
and it was amazing.
Right near the end, where you talking about Jakob, you said "de took the car"
or something along those lines, but not 'he" lol.
Ich Liebe Dich.

Yeah, English is my first language. I know what you mean by "confusing the tenses," but can you perhaps tell me where I did it most so I can fix it/prevent it?
Thanks for your honest opinion though.

*Sakura-chan*

Hmm. The idea was okay.
But be careful with the grammar and stuff. I don't know if english is your first language, but I noticed that you confused the tenses. You would go back and forth between past and present.
So yeah, that was pretty much it. The story itself was okay, you just have to watch out for the things I mentioned above. Keep up the great work.